A Breeze in Mortal Life: "Chasing a draft again? Are you kidding me? Didn’t I send it to you fifty minutes ago? Brother, do you ask for a draft every fifty minutes? That’s too much. If you keep this up, I’m blocking you!"

A Breeze in Mortal Life: "By the way, you haven’t given me any feedback. How is it? Give me an evaluation?"

Xia Sheng did not reply because he didn’t know how to evaluate it better, so he started seeking help. He entered the male-focused editor group, asking their opinions on the draft of "The Chronicles of Sword and Magic." 𝑓𝘳𝘦𝑒𝑤𝑒𝘣𝘯ℴ𝘷𝘦𝓁.𝑐𝑜𝑚

"Everyone, feel free to speak up. Don’t consider A Breeze’s platinum status; that platinum was achieved in the female genre. Now he’s switching to the male genre and doesn’t have a reader base in this channel. Just treat him as a newcomer to web novels and give some feedback on the opening of ’The Chronicles of Sword and Magic’. Feel free to share more."

Fifty thousand words is just an opening for a web novel. Considering the market’s fast pace, this opening might even need to be trimmed further.

An editor can decide whether a novel can be signed after reading the first ten thousand words of the first three Chapters, largely determining the fate of the work.

"The Chronicles of Sword and Magic," is there a problem with the title? It directly highlights the theme, ’Sword and Magic’, concise and to the point, with ’Chronicles’ giving the work a bit of seriousness and legitimacy.

Although it doesn’t have a big hook, there’s nothing toxic either. It’s on a straightforward path, so no one would skip the work just because of this title, and that’s enough.

If the title is too peculiar, it might attract a lot of attention but could also turn many people off, indirectly losing some readers.

Then looking at the introduction of "The Chronicles of Sword and Magic," it straightforwardly depicts the type of story it is, "crossing into the Otherworld," "grand scenes," and mentions the protagonist’s golden finger "I’ve dreamed of it countless times," indicating their understanding of this Otherworld.

Using fluent yet aesthetically pleasing language, it informs readers about this Otherworld’s background, materialism and idealism, magicka and science, theocracy and monarchy, Empire and Kangmi...

"What, a hodgepodge? Can you write it well?"

The readers, while doubtful, feel a slight rise in anticipation.

Later, the protagonist ’I’ passionately delivered a speech, stating many grand goals and revealing the opening predicament.

"But before that, I must navigate a solitary boat on the Nether Sea to survive..."

"Oh, surviving the sea on a little boat? Are you going to die?"

The reader’s anticipation rises again, subconsciously eager to see how he’ll survive.

The last line of the introduction: "This is a story set two hundred billion light-years away, a true chronicle on a certain fantasy planet."

Said with conviction, braggart much? Write poorly, and you’ll get trashed!

This sentence will once again increase the reader’s anticipation, causing many to open the book’s table of contents and officially start reading.

And in terms of the main text, is the beginning of "The Chronicles of Sword and Magic" competent?

(Group 2 Editor-in-Chief) Sharp Blade: "Record-breaking, in the first sixteen Chapters, not to mention the female lead, not a single intelligent creature except the protagonist has truly appeared!"

(Group 6 Editor-in-Chief) Peanuts: "Nonsense, that Gen Gen Tuna which befriends the protagonist is intelligent and has a simple civilization, didn’t you notice?"

(Group 2 Editor-in-Chief) Sharp Blade: "Without text, it’s not civilization. But I’m not speaking pejoratively; although no supporting characters have appeared, the beginning includes all essential elements. The golden finger, worldview, and protagonist image are established, numerous minor conflicts arranged around survival, ultimately resolved smoothly, and the storyline transitions to landing on an island to introduce the next plot... No issues found."

(Group 2 Editor-in-Chief) Sharp Blade: "I’ve always wondered what kind of story A Breeze would start with, to more naturally introduce that vast world background and engage the readers’ emotions to generate anticipation rather than being put off by the complex background and difficult names. Like "Lord of the Mysteries," it’s a proven effective opening where the protagonist, in the ’eye of the storm,’ is revived from suicide, embedding the main plot through a diary, leaving a sense of mystery to entice readers to continue. Yet, it still has barriers; the setup feels stiff, with overly detailed descriptions of the environment and lifestyle, unavoidable in making the world more realistic. I expected A Breeze to use a similar method and style, but unexpectedly, it was entirely different and stunning. Summarize this opening with one phrase: the monk’s house—brilliant!"

(Group 9 Editor-in-Chief) Yy: "’The Chronicles of Sword and Magic,’ due to the protagonist’s dire situation at the beginning, has a faster pace, better engaging readers’ emotions. Through celestial bodies, physical rules distinct from reality, different marine creatures and birds in the sky, and various natural spectacles, it immerses readers in the book. The story progresses tightly, with varied pacing. The world setup is laid seamlessly. When faced with the Otherworld’s mysterious natural conditions and magical creatures, a strong sense of suspense easily imprints itself on hearts, stirring the desire to keep reading, to see what fresh elements the author can conjure. This anticipation fuels a follow-along desire with the protagonist to explore the book world’s depths... As for flaws, maybe the exposition is a bit lengthy. It doesn’t feel that way while reading, but afterward realizing—50,000 words and just hitting the main storyline! Slow progress... Get A Breeze writing quickly!!"

(Group 7 Editor-in-Chief) December: "Concise language, sharp as a razor—rare in web novels, distinct from A Breeze’s previous style. When seeing the protagonist fishing while escaping a storm with sails, I thought I had found a magical version of ’The Old Man and the Sea.’ Then I realized "The Chronicles of Sword and Magic" has a style differing from both web novels and traditional literature. In characters’ dialogues, there are few embellishments. Only in describing the Otherworld’s landscapes and creatures will it lavishly display ornate prose. It reads like poetry, and with illustrations, the experience is doubled!"